Corrected Essay 6

Today, I would like to introduce my favorite TV drama. It is “Prison Break.” This is
made in the U.S., and broadcast by television all over the world. This is a suspense story,
but it makes people excited. The leading part is played by Wentworth Miller.


I want to tell you about the main character performed by him. His name is Michael
Scofield, and he works as a qualified architect who is highly intelligent. Michael has
the courage to do everything.

Next, I will introduce the story in detail. It is set in a prison. Michael’s brother,
Lincoln, was arrested because of of being found guilty of shoting the brother of the
Vice President, so he was committed to prison. Lincoln received an sentence of the
death penalty after a month, and Michael decided to help him and wanted him to
escape from there. Michael’s friend took part in the reconstruction of prison which
took in his older brother. To learn the plan of the whole prison, Michael tattooed the
blueprints of the prison on his body. When all the other plans are set, Michael
robbed a bank, and he was caught by the police for the purpose of being committed
to the same prison that his brother is in. A lawyer, Veronica, who is the lover of the
older brother is going to defend Michael, but Michael refused and urged at the trial
to be committed to the same prison with his brother without a stay of execution.
After the confinement, he immediately becomes friends with Fernando who is
imprisoned in the same room with him, and received an explanation of the various
people of consequence in the prison. However, Michael researched the persons who
are necessary for his plan of a jailbreak before he was imprisoned. At first, Michael
approaches Abruzzi who is absolutely necessary for a jailbreak. He is like a boss in
the prison, and he was a mafia member before his confinement. Michael knows that
he is so dangerous, but he approaches for as a step of the jailbreak.

I knew this drama when I was a high school student. I like watching DVDs from
way back, but I had never known about “Prison Break.” After watching this, I
became a fan immediately. Of course the story is so exciting, and the main character,
Michael Scofield is a dauntless man. I think the main points are how the plan is
made and how Michael tries to break out of prison, and human relations in the prison. I strongly recommend this drama to everyone.

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Essay 6 : The First Episode of a Foreign TV Drama

Today, I would like to introduce my favorite TV drama. It is “Prison Break.” This is made in the U.S., and broadcasted by television in the world. This is a suspense story, but it makes people excited. It is played a leading part by Wentworth Miller.

 I want to tell you the main character performed by him. His name is Michael Scofield, and he works as a qualified architect who is highly intelligent. Michael has the courage to do everything.

Next, I will introduce the story more. It is broken up in the prison. Michael’s brother, Lincoln, was arrested because of the guilt that shot the brother of the Vice President, so he was committed to prison. Lincoln received an advice of the death penalty after a month, and Michael decided to help him and want him to escape from there. A Michael’s friend took part in the reconstruction of prison which took in his older brother. To learn a course of a whole prison, Michael tattooed the general drawing of the prison. When all other plans are set, Michael attacked the bank, and he is caught by the police on purpose to be committed to the same prison that his brother is in. A lawyer, Veronica who is a lover of the older brother is going to defend Michael, but Michael refused and urged the trial to be committed to the same prison with his brother without a stay of execution. After the confinement, he gets along well with Fernando who is imprisoned in the same room with him immediately, and received the explanation of various people of consequence in the prison. However, Michael researched person who is necessary for his plan of a jailbreak since before he was imprisoned. At first, Michael approaches Abruzzi who is absolutely necessary for a jailbreak. He is the existence like a boss in the prison, and he was a mafia before the confinement. Michael knows that he is so dangerous, but he approaches for a step of a jailbreak.
I knew this drama when I was a high school student. I like watching DVD from way back, but I had never known “Prison Break.” After watching this, I became a fan immediately. Of course the story is so exciting, and the main character, Michael Scofield is a dauntless man. I think the main points are how the plan is and Michael tries to break a prison, and human relations in the prison. I recommend this drama.

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BR 1-15 : The Little Mermaid

The reason why I wrote about this book was that I like this story very much. I have ever watched the movie of The Little Mermaid published by Disney. I have ever watched it many times. It is my favorite Disney movie, and it is famous for a fairy tale in the world.
This story is about a girl who is mermaid. She and her sisters respected the life on the ground. One day she looked at the sky and met a prince Erick, and she helped him. They fell in love, but there are a lot of difficulties. Finally, she could become a human, and she spends her life very happily.
I think this is fantasy and romance story. Everyone likes this story if you are a girl. But it can be sad love story. Maybe I would like this story if I become an adult.

Daynes, Katie. (2007). The Little Mermaid. London, England: Usborne.

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Christian Louboutin

I love shoes! I love shoes as a fashion item. Especially I love heels so much. I think that high heels make womans look beautiful, noble, and feminine. I have about 10 heels. I am tall, so if I wear heels, I can be seen so tall woman. But I don't care, because I think being tall is not bad, and special. If I wear heels, I always feel like being a super model runs runnway like Paris Collection. I want more items. Christian Louboutin is famous as bland of shoes around the world. Especially the heels are so popular, and is worn by many actresses, celebrities, and so on. Someday I want to buy it by myself, and become a lady who suits Louboutin's heels.

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Corrected Essay 5

Hello. Let me introduce myself. My name is Saki, and I’m 40 years old.

I worked as a cabin attendant at Aso Kumamoto airport. I had a dream in the past,
which was being a CA and working at an airport. I like traveling, so I have traveled to a
lot of places. I have taken a plane many times to go to foreign countries. Then, I admire
people working at airport, especially CA, so my long‐cherished dream has come true. I
am happy to do my favorite thing.

I got married to my husband 15 years ago. His name is Ronaldo. I met him in Hawaii
when I traveled there. He lived in Hawaii, and he was walking in the neighborhood, and
I was going shopping near the hotel I was staying. But I lost my way, so I asked a man
where the hotel is. My husband is that man. He is so kind and funny, and he is
good-looking guy. He always makes me happy. Also, we live in Hawaii after getting
married.

I have a son and a daughter. Their names are Toshi and Emi. He is 10 years old, and
she is 5 years old. They go to the International school near my house. Toshi belongs to a
soccer club, and he wants to be good at playing soccer like Ronaldo Christiano. He
makes an effort everyday to win the next match. Also, Emi takes lessons in ballet. She
likes ballet very much. They are mischievous children, so I am tired of taking care of
them. But I love them very much, so I always laugh and will never be bored.

Also, we have a dog. Her name is Anna, and she is a Chihuahua. She has long hair.
She is very cute! When I came home, she runs to me like she was waiting for my return
home. My hobby is walking her when it is sunny.

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Ariana Grande

I would like to introduce my favorite singer. She is Ariana Grande. She is a singer and a actress, and from the USA. She was born June 26 in 1993, so she and I are in the same age. Her older brother, Flanky is carrying on activities as a actor.
She is very popular in not only Japan, but also the whole world. She has a cute face, sings a song with her heartful voice, and has a sence of fashionable coordinate. That's why she is loved from people in the world.
I had knew her name and face, but I never listened her music. My friends likes her and her songs, so I tryed listening her songs and knowing her. Then, I became her fan! Her voice is powerful, but her sound is lythmical. Also, reading a fashion magazine published in the U.S., her fashion is so good. I love her very much.

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Typing Homework : Vacation Plans

I like summer very much, so I am planning a lot of funny things. I have some reasons why I like summer. First, my birthday is August 27. I think coming birthday is happy for almost everyone. I had done something special every year. Second, we can do something special which can be done only summer. I want to go to the sea, the river, and the aquarium, swim in the pool, have BBQ, and go shopping. I like the atmosphere of summer. Third, of course, we don't have to go to the school. We can wake up later than school day.

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