Corrected Essay 6

Today, I would like to introduce my favorite TV drama. It is “Prison Break.” This is
made in the U.S., and broadcast by television all over the world. This is a suspense story,
but it makes people excited. The leading part is played by Wentworth Miller.


I want to tell you about the main character performed by him. His name is Michael
Scofield, and he works as a qualified architect who is highly intelligent. Michael has
the courage to do everything.

Next, I will introduce the story in detail. It is set in a prison. Michael’s brother,
Lincoln, was arrested because of of being found guilty of shoting the brother of the
Vice President, so he was committed to prison. Lincoln received an sentence of the
death penalty after a month, and Michael decided to help him and wanted him to
escape from there. Michael’s friend took part in the reconstruction of prison which
took in his older brother. To learn the plan of the whole prison, Michael tattooed the
blueprints of the prison on his body. When all the other plans are set, Michael
robbed a bank, and he was caught by the police for the purpose of being committed
to the same prison that his brother is in. A lawyer, Veronica, who is the lover of the
older brother is going to defend Michael, but Michael refused and urged at the trial
to be committed to the same prison with his brother without a stay of execution.
After the confinement, he immediately becomes friends with Fernando who is
imprisoned in the same room with him, and received an explanation of the various
people of consequence in the prison. However, Michael researched the persons who
are necessary for his plan of a jailbreak before he was imprisoned. At first, Michael
approaches Abruzzi who is absolutely necessary for a jailbreak. He is like a boss in
the prison, and he was a mafia member before his confinement. Michael knows that
he is so dangerous, but he approaches for as a step of the jailbreak.

I knew this drama when I was a high school student. I like watching DVDs from
way back, but I had never known about “Prison Break.” After watching this, I
became a fan immediately. Of course the story is so exciting, and the main character,
Michael Scofield is a dauntless man. I think the main points are how the plan is
made and how Michael tries to break out of prison, and human relations in the prison. I strongly recommend this drama to everyone.

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Essay 6 : The First Episode of a Foreign TV Drama

Today, I would like to introduce my favorite TV drama. It is “Prison Break.” This is made in the U.S., and broadcasted by television in the world. This is a suspense story, but it makes people excited. It is played a leading part by Wentworth Miller.

 I want to tell you the main character performed by him. His name is Michael Scofield, and he works as a qualified architect who is highly intelligent. Michael has the courage to do everything.

Next, I will introduce the story more. It is broken up in the prison. Michael’s brother, Lincoln, was arrested because of the guilt that shot the brother of the Vice President, so he was committed to prison. Lincoln received an advice of the death penalty after a month, and Michael decided to help him and want him to escape from there. A Michael’s friend took part in the reconstruction of prison which took in his older brother. To learn a course of a whole prison, Michael tattooed the general drawing of the prison. When all other plans are set, Michael attacked the bank, and he is caught by the police on purpose to be committed to the same prison that his brother is in. A lawyer, Veronica who is a lover of the older brother is going to defend Michael, but Michael refused and urged the trial to be committed to the same prison with his brother without a stay of execution. After the confinement, he gets along well with Fernando who is imprisoned in the same room with him immediately, and received the explanation of various people of consequence in the prison. However, Michael researched person who is necessary for his plan of a jailbreak since before he was imprisoned. At first, Michael approaches Abruzzi who is absolutely necessary for a jailbreak. He is the existence like a boss in the prison, and he was a mafia before the confinement. Michael knows that he is so dangerous, but he approaches for a step of a jailbreak.
I knew this drama when I was a high school student. I like watching DVD from way back, but I had never known “Prison Break.” After watching this, I became a fan immediately. Of course the story is so exciting, and the main character, Michael Scofield is a dauntless man. I think the main points are how the plan is and Michael tries to break a prison, and human relations in the prison. I recommend this drama.

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BR 1-15 : The Little Mermaid

The reason why I wrote about this book was that I like this story very much. I have ever watched the movie of The Little Mermaid published by Disney. I have ever watched it many times. It is my favorite Disney movie, and it is famous for a fairy tale in the world.
This story is about a girl who is mermaid. She and her sisters respected the life on the ground. One day she looked at the sky and met a prince Erick, and she helped him. They fell in love, but there are a lot of difficulties. Finally, she could become a human, and she spends her life very happily.
I think this is fantasy and romance story. Everyone likes this story if you are a girl. But it can be sad love story. Maybe I would like this story if I become an adult.

Daynes, Katie. (2007). The Little Mermaid. London, England: Usborne.

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Christian Louboutin

I love shoes! I love shoes as a fashion item. Especially I love heels so much. I think that high heels make womans look beautiful, noble, and feminine. I have about 10 heels. I am tall, so if I wear heels, I can be seen so tall woman. But I don't care, because I think being tall is not bad, and special. If I wear heels, I always feel like being a super model runs runnway like Paris Collection. I want more items. Christian Louboutin is famous as bland of shoes around the world. Especially the heels are so popular, and is worn by many actresses, celebrities, and so on. Someday I want to buy it by myself, and become a lady who suits Louboutin's heels.

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Corrected Essay 5

Hello. Let me introduce myself. My name is Saki, and I’m 40 years old.

I worked as a cabin attendant at Aso Kumamoto airport. I had a dream in the past,
which was being a CA and working at an airport. I like traveling, so I have traveled to a
lot of places. I have taken a plane many times to go to foreign countries. Then, I admire
people working at airport, especially CA, so my long‐cherished dream has come true. I
am happy to do my favorite thing.

I got married to my husband 15 years ago. His name is Ronaldo. I met him in Hawaii
when I traveled there. He lived in Hawaii, and he was walking in the neighborhood, and
I was going shopping near the hotel I was staying. But I lost my way, so I asked a man
where the hotel is. My husband is that man. He is so kind and funny, and he is
good-looking guy. He always makes me happy. Also, we live in Hawaii after getting
married.

I have a son and a daughter. Their names are Toshi and Emi. He is 10 years old, and
she is 5 years old. They go to the International school near my house. Toshi belongs to a
soccer club, and he wants to be good at playing soccer like Ronaldo Christiano. He
makes an effort everyday to win the next match. Also, Emi takes lessons in ballet. She
likes ballet very much. They are mischievous children, so I am tired of taking care of
them. But I love them very much, so I always laugh and will never be bored.

Also, we have a dog. Her name is Anna, and she is a Chihuahua. She has long hair.
She is very cute! When I came home, she runs to me like she was waiting for my return
home. My hobby is walking her when it is sunny.

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Ariana Grande

I would like to introduce my favorite singer. She is Ariana Grande. She is a singer and a actress, and from the USA. She was born June 26 in 1993, so she and I are in the same age. Her older brother, Flanky is carrying on activities as a actor.
She is very popular in not only Japan, but also the whole world. She has a cute face, sings a song with her heartful voice, and has a sence of fashionable coordinate. That's why she is loved from people in the world.
I had knew her name and face, but I never listened her music. My friends likes her and her songs, so I tryed listening her songs and knowing her. Then, I became her fan! Her voice is powerful, but her sound is lythmical. Also, reading a fashion magazine published in the U.S., her fashion is so good. I love her very much.

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Typing Homework : Vacation Plans

I like summer very much, so I am planning a lot of funny things. I have some reasons why I like summer. First, my birthday is August 27. I think coming birthday is happy for almost everyone. I had done something special every year. Second, we can do something special which can be done only summer. I want to go to the sea, the river, and the aquarium, swim in the pool, have BBQ, and go shopping. I like the atmosphere of summer. Third, of course, we don't have to go to the school. We can wake up later than school day.

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Br 1-14 : The Story of Trains

Today, rail tracks cover most of the world, yet only two hundred years ago, they did not exist. Every day trains take people to work and on holiday. They can carry cars, crates or crocodiles and travel under the sea. This book tells the incredible story of trains and how it all began with a small engine and a wagon full of people. 
I use train some times, and think how useful way to carry every thing this is. At first time, train was smaller than now. Reading this book, I could know how train are made, used, and handed down to modern times.

Bingham, Jane. (2004). The Story of Trains. London, England: Usborne.

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BR 1-13 : The Story of Chocolate

I love chocolate! It's the reason why I choose this book. I read this book, but I didn't know anything about chocolate. First, chocolate is drunk from a thousand years ago, and it was a big secret. Only a few people drank it and nobody ate it. Second, chocolate is made of cacao beans. The drink is popular around the ancient people. Chocolate is drunk for a long long time, I knew that, I felt historical. I like chocolate cakes very much, and I want to have GODIVA someday!

Daynes, Katie. (2004) The story of chocolate. London, England : Usborne.

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Essay 5 : My self introduction (2034)

Hello. Let me introduce my self. My name is Saki, and I’m 40 years old.

I worked as a cabin attendant at Aso Kumamoto airport. I had a dream in the past, so it was being CA and working at airport. I like traveling, so I have ever traveled a lot of places. I have taken a plane many times to go to foreign countries. Then, I admire people working at airport especially CA, so my long‐cherished dream has come true. I am happy to do my favorite thing.

I got married to my husband 15 years ago. His name is Ronaldo. I met him at Hawaii when I traveled there. He lived Hawaii, and he was walking the neighborhood, and I was going shopping near the hotel I stayed. But I lost my way, so I asked a man where the hotel is. My husband is that man. He is so kind and funny, and he is good-looking guy. He always makes me happy. Also, we live in Hawaii after getting married.

I have a son and a daughter. Their names are Toshi and Emi. He is 10 years old, and she is 5 years old. They go to International school near my house. Toshi belong to a soccer club, and he wants to be good at playing soccer like Ronaldo Christiano. He makes an effort everyday to win the next match. Also, Emi takes lessons in ballet. She likes a ballet very much. They are mischievous children, so I am tired of taking care of them. But I love them very much, so I always laugh and will never bored everyday.

Also, we have a dog. Her name is Anna, and the kinf of her is Chihuahua. She has a long hair. She is very cute! When I came home, she plunges to me like waiting my returing home. My hobby is walking her when it is sunny.

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BR 1-12 : Christmas Around the World

 

This story is written about Christmas around the world. The reason why I choose this book is that I like Christmas day very much. I understood that people around the world are looking forward to the day every year. This book published when the event called Christmas started, how a town is ornamented, what people do at that day and before, who is Santa Claus, and so on. At last of this book, it is written how to make Christmas cookies. Please read this and try to cook.
When I was a child, I believed that Santa Claus exist really. I wrote a letter to him, but I looked my father and mother put the presents near our pillows. 

Sims, Lesley. (2005). Christmas around the world. London, England: Usborne. 

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On June 4, Amuro Namie's new album was released. This album is the ballad best, so it is collected her ballad songs ever. It is recorded 15 songs that selected by votes of her popularlity by a lot of her fans. I know "CAN YOU CELEBRATE?." "The Meaning Of Us," "Four Seasons," "TSUKI," and "ALL FOR YOU." I like them very much. I always like ballad songs.
I have a dream, and which is singing "CAN YOU CELEBRATE?" on my wedding ceremony. It is famous for wedding song. I recommend her so much!

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A Home-Party

About three weeks ago, I was invited to a home-party by my friends. After my working a part-time job, I went to Kurokami on that day. My friends Mami came for me by her car, and we went to her house. Naoto, Shiori, and Misako had already arrived and made takoyaki. Naoto was playing the TV game. Shiori and Misako was cooking very well. Takoyaki was very delicious! After an hours ago, Naoki and mizuki came. We talked, played, and laughed for a long time. I want to held a home-party more time. I like them very much!

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Corrected Essay 4

I have a lot of memorial days, but I would like to talk one of the special days for me. It
was March 8 in 2005, and it is a day when I won the championship of the badminton
club for the first time. I remember the day clearly, so let me introduce my best day.

I joined a badminton club when I was a student of elementary school. The reason why I
belonged to the club is only because I was invited by my friends, not that I wanted to
play badminton. I had never played it before that time. We practiced every Wednesday,
but I lacked the motivation to play badminton. I thought I didn’t need to try practicing
and becoming better at it.

However, as time went on, I became to think I wanted to play it and be better more and
more. When I was in the sixth grade, I was told that I was good and would win the
championship. I had confidence in myself, but I couldn’t easily do as well as my wishes .
I regretted not putting my heart into practice, so I made more efforts.

The last tournament was held on March 8, and I took part in a doubles match with my
partner, Aoi. She was so good at playing badminton. We won the semifinal game
smoothly, but our rivals were powerful players. I and she lost the confidence for just a
second, but we remembered deciding to win the last championship absolutely. We
thought we were uncertain of our confidence, but never gave up and stick to the match
to the end, we could defeat our rival. We couldn’t believe we won them, being aware of
winning, and we became so happy and couldn’t stop crying tears of happiness.

I thought I was glad that I didn’t retire from the club. I will never forget this day.

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Essay 4 ：My Best Days

I have a lot of memorial days, but I would like to talk one of special days. It is March 8 in 2005, and it is a day when I won the championship of badminton club for the first time. I remember the day clearly, so let me introduce my best day.

 

I joined a badminton club when I was a student of elementary school. The reason why I belonged the club is just I was invited by my friends, not I wanted to play badminton. I had never played it since that time. We practiced on every Wednesday, but I lacked the motivation to play badminton. I thought I didn’t need to try practicing and becoming better at it.

 

However, as time goes on, I became to think I want to play it and be better more and more. When I was sixth grade, I was said that I was good and would win the championship. I had confident in myself, but I couldn’t do well as my wishes not easily. I regretted not putting my heart into practice, so I made efforts so much.

 

It is held the last tournament on March 8, and I took part in a doubles match with my partner, Aoi. She was good at playing badminton so much. We won a semifinal game smoothly, but the rival is powerful players. I and she lost the confidence just a second, but we remembered deciding to win the last championship absolutely. We thought it was uncertain of our confidence, but never gave up and stick to the match to the end, we could win the rival. We couldn’t believe we won them, being aware of winning, and we became so happy and couldn’t stop crying tears of happiness.

 

I thought I am glad not to retire the club. I will never forget this day.

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Typing Homework : About blogging

I think it is interesting for me to post on my blog, because I like writing and a printing type so much. On my blog, it can be seen not only my homework of writing class, but also my free-writing or my diary post. I wrote something funny and my favorite things almost. However, I can't use blog every day, because I don't have my own computers. It is important for students to have their own computers and blog. Thanks to blogging, I became to like typing and writing better. I will never forget the importance of blogging forever.

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Typing Homework : My favorite book

This time, I am going to introduce my favorite book. It is "Harry Potter." Maybe almost everyone has known or heard its name. This is a famous story all over the world. It is produced as a book and movie. I was a student of elementary school when I read this book for the first time. It was written in Japanese. However, when I became a high school student, I try reading it written in English. This is a fantasy story. A main character, Harry is a wizard, so he uses a magic and make happen something strange and interesting.

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BR 1-10 : The Fabulous Story of Fashion

The reason why I choose this book is that I like fashionable clothes and goods very much and wanted to know its history. This book explained why people wear clothes, what goods people wear in those age, how fashion became, how clothes people around the world like, and so on. I understood, in the ancient world, people often wear bronze helmet, leg guards, shield, and breastplate. It looks gorgeous. Also in Middle Ages, especially Europe like Rome, German, and Paris wear clothes look heavy and gorgeous. And I was surprised to know that little boy wear a lacy ruff, a dress, an apron, a bib and a cap like little girl and in France man wore a long, curly wig.

Daynes, Kate. (2006). The Fabulous Story of Fashion. London, England:Usborne.

 

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BR 1-09 : The Fairyground Ghost

One day, Jake Hubbard knew that the fair is held in his town. He was so excited, but his parents were very busy and had no time. His sister, Marcia, spent the whole time on the phone. Jake wanted to go the fair so much, so Marcia decided to take him with her boyfriend, Brad. But they left Jake alone and headed the Tunnel of Love. When Jake walk alone, he found a poster which was written the ghost train. This attraction made people scared, but a little ghost wasn't scary. Jake liked him, but because of his the funniest look, he must be tested. He is not good as a real ghost, so he was going to disappear from the store. So Jake invited the ghost to have some fun on the fair. They enjoyed many attractions, and they became friends. The ghost could go back to the store and scare the people thank for Jake. I dislike the ghost or horror story, this story was a funny story. I think it is interesting to exist ghost like him.

Everett, Felicity. (2002). The Fairground Ghost. London, England:Usborne.

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Happy - Pharell Williams

Now, I would like to tell you Pharell Williams. He is a singer in the U.S., and he is known for "happy" produced in 2013. This is the most famous song of his songs. The chance that I know this song is that Mr.Tomei introduced this song and movie in Writing class a few weeks ago. I had never known and heard this songs, but I became to like that right away. "Happy" makes us happy so much by its lyrics and the sounds. I like the lyrics so much, especially this part, "Because I'm happy Clap along if you know what happiness is to you Because I'm happy Clap along if you feel like that's what you wanna do Here come bad news talking this and that Give me all you got, don't hold back Well I should probably warn you I'll be just fine No offense to you don't waste your time." This song makes us have courage and brave. If I am sad or tired, I will listen to this song and make me happy!

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